A destroyed dream

by Suela
(Brazil)

She left, leaving behind her house, her family, everything she loved to carry out her dream. She would not miss out the oportunity to show off all her talent as a model.
Everything was going well. She was earning so much money, that soon she could by a house that she had promissed for her parents. However, her dream was drastically destroyed at that moment, when she crossed the road and a vehicle in high speed run her down. The ambulance arrived immediately, but unfortunately, she passed away before her entrance in the hospital.


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She left, leaving behind her house, her family, everything she loved, to carry out her dream.
She would not miss out on the opportunity to show off all her talent as a model.

Everything was going well. She was earning so much money, that soon she could by the house
that she had promised for her parents. However, her dream was drastically destroyed at that moment,
when she crossed the road and a high speed vehicle ran her down.

The ambulance arrived immediately, but unfortunately, she passed away before she got to the hospital.